It's such a time consuming thing,
Vacation.
There's packing,
and provisions,
and plans,
and lists.
There's loose ends to attend to,
and loose ends to be made.
Yet even in these stress filled times,
before a stress filled drive,
to a slightly less stressful vacation,
moments with a certain charm,
are still to be found.
Walking through the room,
to attend to some last minute packing,
preparations,
provisions,
something catches my eye.
A beautiful poses,
a sly grin,
a look in the eye, as if to say,
You wish you had this.
A wonderful moment
for pictures.
The trip through the house,
a scavenger hunt for a camera.
One thing I'm sure of.
My model won't be there for long.
Yet against all odds,
I return to the same statue,
the same muse,
as I'd left before,
waiting patiently.
And lo, as the shot is taken,
the moment immortalized,
the model,
once a statue,
breaks her stillness,
as she lies on her belly,
and casually slithers away.
Leaving me to continue,
through these stress filled times.
An interesting piece, Jordan. It was cool how you seemed to devolope your own poetry style. I didn't understand all of it but sometimes that's the purpose of poems.
ReplyDeleteThanks. It about my snake, Gil. She started posing one the day my family was going on our trip to Mercer, so I managed to run off, get my camera, and snap a few *crappy* pictures, which is rare because she almost never poses and when she does, she never stays in that position long enough for me to get a pic. I forgot to put an author's note, and I wanted to put it in the comments so I could see how other people interpreted it without being told that it's about a little garter snake living in my living room.
ReplyDeleteThis is a good poem Jordan, I think an author's note is important though. I agree with Derek, I didn't really understand it all the way and an authors not could help clear it up for me. I think the part where you describe her slithering off because you have a snake pendant picture. with a couple of quick fixes, I think this poem could live up to it's full potential.
ReplyDeleteThis poem had nice vocabulary in it and the repetition you used help give the reader a moment to take in what your saying. Nice job on this, but an authors note would be helpful to clear up some parts that lost me. Also, I agree with Abby an authors note would also help me understand why there is a picture of a snake pendent.
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